Conclusion to article (draft)
At our presentation on this very subject at the ECCTYC conference, one attendee asked in an overwhelmed and befuddled voice, “How in the world did you do all this?” One of us replied, “You just do it. You can worry about sleep later.” But while that may be true to a large extent, it is important to recognize that all of us didn’t necessarily do all of the above. Or if we did, we did them in varying degrees of intensity. The point is that you push yourself to stand out from the crowd. Anyone who has a chance of getting the job has an MA at least, just like you. So making yourself a student of the hiring process will certainly make you much more prepared for the numerous tests you will take along the way. Every tangible and intangible job-related act you engage in could be the one that puts you over the edge. And reading this article is probably a pretty good start.
posted by Optimism One | 3:06 PM
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My questions: Is it too trite, particularly toward the end? Too cheesy (last sentence)? Anything missing?
I love the conclusion. It really captures what we talked about in our meeting with regard to that great question that was asked of us. The paragraph puts things together nicely. I like its ending--it expresses the idea that it's the little things, such as reading a particular article even, that add up and help with the job search. On that same point, though, here's one thought to consider: while the phrase "puts you over the edge" expresses standing out from the crowd, the phrase might also signal negative connotations.
..."tests you will take"...
Perhaps we want to call them "tasks" or "obstacles." Tests sounds a little strange in the context...what do you think?
How about:
"So making yourself a student of the hiring process will certainly make you much more prepared for the numerous obstacles you will face along the way. Every tangible and intangible job-related act you engage in could be the one that helps you rise above the rest. And reading this article is probably a pretty good start."
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I like "tasks you will encounter" a little better. "Obstacles" seems negative to me. But I like "rise above the rest" better than "put you over the edge." Thank you both. Do students use blogs for this type of revision commentary?
I've had varying degrees of success...but, as you can see, it can be a lot more engaging (a lot more like a conversation than the individual review that occurs in peer review often).
And, yeah, I think the more positive we come across the less daunting some of these tasks we're recommending may seem.
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